User blog comment:Bradyl888/The story of nibui/@comment-3253026-20110201041926

Quite a lot of potential. I liked how you were able to describe the battle and how each giaprey moved very well. This can turn out great cause there's so many options of where it can go. The only thing I would have to criticize is your grammer, but other than that keep it up. I'd like to see were it could go.