User blog comment:The Monster-Hunter/Life of The Hunter Fanfic./@comment-2053489-20100713002414

Nice round with the Barioth, I assume the Ice Claw is a GS, or am I wrong?

One advice maybe: You always repeat names and things like that

"Then Michael...michael did...although Michael" and so on.

this is not meant to say your bad, its only a small thing you could avoid.( Call it productive Critic^^ )

On the other hand, for being so short, your storytelling is nice^^