User blog comment:KaiserLos/Monster Chronicles (FanFic) Chapter 1- A dream/@comment-2053489-20110103220201

Well yeah, it is predictable, fast and straightforward. Especially the dialogues need some more depth other than the obvious stuff. (And I personally don't like stuff like W/O or such annotations outside of the actual story. Destroys the atmosphere.)

But even if there are some basic mistakes, it is good for a first try.

I'll watch it further, keep it up.( BTW, adding the fanfic category and doing some advertising on other blogs helps finding readers alot.)