User blog comment:Ohmpahkan/Cycle of life/@comment-3298463-20110411210434/@comment-1011548-20110412160652

I liked it. I really liked it. I mean, obviously it's short, but it's good. A couple of things, though: - 'Anyways' sounds really informal. 'Anyway' would be better, or perhaps 'regardless'? - This part of the sentence doesn't quite work: "as the large groups of Popo that used to graze there during the day had already ended with all the scarce plant life there could have been." Maybe you could have something like 'the large groups of Popo that had been grazing there during the day had already devoured the few meager plants that could be found'? I'm looking forward to the conclusion!