User blog comment:BariothQueen/FanFic/@comment-3349321-20110122055624/@comment-3349321-20110122063417

Basically what Tiger said. It does have great potential (emphasis on that, lol). But there are some grammer and spelling mistakes, and some punctuation on it. Of course, you should be surprised how many mistakes even the most famous writers make at first, for example, Stephen King, JK Rowling, and others. Also with the author who made the Twilight series. (never read them though) But every writer has a bad start with a story they are writing. Especially when they are devoted to them. As for me, I make a ton of mistakes. I tend to repeat myself for one, and leave out important details, for two. Mostly it's due from past experiences, that I lose my train of thought, and I jot everything down, but with much detail as possible, even though I leave out some things. Everyone can be a writer, as much as the saying "Anyone can cook" or, "Anyone can sing". Sorry for the long type.. lmao. But anyway, it has a ton of potential. And I'm very interested in it to be honest! :) can't wait for the next chapter!